How does my abstract of my research paper sound to you? 10 points?

There are those who actually act blind to the substantial threat that heart diseases pose. Some





people go about living their lives unafraid and unaware that any day can be their last day. They





eat and drink without remorse and without knowing whether or not what they are doing is





healthy to their own bodies. In the medical world, they encounter all kinds of heart conditions





and all kinds of patients having them. Although some individuals are becoming more aware of





the dangers of heart disease, most people lack basic knowledge regarding the prevention and





management of this serious medical condition.





A heart disease can be called by many terminologies. The processes and implications of a





heart disease can be quite complex, especially for those who are experiencing it whether as a





victim or someone related to the victim. It is therefore the purpose of this discussion to





comprehend why the heart disease contributes to almost half the deaths recorded in society. This





paper will begin by first explaining the basic understanding of what a heart disease is or how it





is generally perceived by individuals. Then, this paper will explain the most common causes





that may bring about heart diseases. Following this, the technology and modern techniques that





are used in a laboratory shall also be analyzed. Finally, this paper will illustrate some of the





conventional and known heart surgeries that are in practice today.

How does my abstract of my research paper sound to you? 10 points?
It sounds good but there are a few errors. You might want to check with your teacher or look over the assignment though...I think that an abstract is suppost to be only a paragraph long by APA standards.





(I edited it for you)


There are those who are blissfully unaware of the substantial threat that hear disease poses. Some people go about living their lives unafraid and unaware that any day can be their last day. They eat and drink without remorse and without consideration for their own health and well being. In the medical world, there are a variety of heart conditions. These conditions can be seen in all types of patients, irregardless of gender, race, age and nationality. Although the public is becoming more aware of the dangers of heart disease, many people still lack the basic knowledge regarding the prevention and management of this serious medical condition.





Heart disease can fall into many different categories. The diagnoses and treatment of heart disease can be quite complex. It is difficult not only for those diagnosed with it, but also for the patient's family and friends. It is therefore the purpose of this article to explain why heart disease contributes to almost half the deaths recorded in society(put your country instead of "society").





This paper will explain what a heart disease is and common beliefs held by individuals about heart disease. It will then explain the causes of heart disease, and modern techniques and technology tha is used to analyze and treat the disease. Finally, this paper will illustrate some of the conventional heart surgeries that are in practice today.
Reply:Sounds good to me.
Reply:wow can't wait to read the final paper sounds really cool